A very well write story, I enjoyed it, good concept, informative description and although at the start I wasn't gripped into reading it by the second page it had got me and I wanted to finish it.

Now the bad points, or more the points you can develop on:
- The start did not get me as much as it should, mabye put in some sort of street fight at the start which is just finishing with Grant doing the final dodge and delievring the finishing blow and depending on why hes fighting returning what was stolen to someone or just walking off;
- The start also needs more development, i.e. another proper but quick fight before where it starts now, but after the above, and maybe after the fight he talks to someone who has been a friend to him since he's lost his memory (maybe the person who found him and took care of him for a bit when he first lost his memory);
- You could add something like 'there was a shaodw in the corner watching him as he left with Harry', as that will give a story to develop later on after the ending at the moment (maybe a new gang coming town that wants to take down the mob and rule the city);
- You could go with a storyline later on down the line of him quesitoning working for the mob anymore because he has to do something that he fought foundly about while he didn't have any memories;
- More charater development with his wife Although at the moment with what you've written its perfect so far I'm making this comment for later on down the line however I'm sure you had this planned anyway.
- More suspense is needed in it. It's a good story so far however it doesn't have a lot of suspence in it, but considering its short I guess that's understandable.

Right, well thats all I got, alot of those comments are story expansions rather than improvements I know but still I hope you find them useful. And with that I will like to say: It is an excellant story so far and I loved the ending line, it really went well.